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Emperor's Will be done?Pt3.5by ~DustyGrafix

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Alright, bonus time!!!
I'm doing two pics for two reasons.
1) The events that take place are longer to explain, so to break up the long reading, I did two pictures. I myself don't have the attention span to read without some pics.
2) I will be gone for a few weeks, so this will make up for the weeks I'm gone.

Votes are in:
Sarcophagus: 11 votes
Dark Tunnels: 5 votes
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Is it my bad luck, or have I been cursed by the warp? I would have lost my sanity yesterday if it weren't for things I learned in the past few hours.
For one, I can keep my mind distracted from the danger if I focus on menial tasks, like how to use my torn sleeves to stop the loss of blood of a mysterious godless xeno.

Well, yesterday my adrenaline got a workout. I had used the last of my strength to pry open one of the larger sarcophagi with the metal pipe I found earlier. I swear the orks were right on top of me from the loud noises they make with their shooters and waaghs. Shit, they could've been watchin' me for sport to see if I could do it. I put her inside, only to jump in the dark "bone-box" with her. The crunch of bones and ancient bronze gave away that this is (was) a rich aristocrat’s resting place.

I pulled the top back on and waited. The lights on the xeno's body armor were out. Good thing because moments later, I heard major rumbles of countless orks run by us. A few squigs jumped up on top of the cover, trying to get inside, but seemed to be pulled off by chains. They must be making a major move on the 137th Liberation Unit. I bet the guards don't even know this many orks are behind the front line. DAMMIT!!!

She was still alive. I heard her breathing behind that mask. I tried to take it off in the darkness, but it seemed to be locked on somehow. Ignoring that, I felt her blood all over. She was bleeding to death, and something had to be done. I could just leave her to die and try to make it out of here, but she has saved me countless times. Maybe my luck is based off of karma, maybe not, but I owe it to her. I found that round medic kit on her backpack. Fumbling in the darkness, I detached it. I stumbled to find an opening, but it's impossible in complete blackness. I was dozing off from a long day, but she would be dead in the morning if I didn't do something. I ripped off my sleeve and wrapped it around her arm to stop the bleeding. It’s pretty easy to find the wound in the dark from nasty gashes from smooth leathery skin. By the Emperor’s name, I hope I did it right the first time because I couldn’t fight off the sleep this time.
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Artists note: Sorry for the dark pic, but I was wanting to get the feel that they are running in dark catacombs.

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~NightofRome Aug 9, 2012

I think this Fic might change me from a Necron player to a tau player!

~JTPeter Dec 12, 2010

Very nice again.

~ColonelMarksman Jan 26, 2010

I am an extremely hard critic of stories. To give you an idea, I have studied the art of writing and know that Mary Higgans Clark got published only because of favors; she's not very good. It's taken Stephen King years to write anything good: he's only popular because he's been writing for so long, in so many genres. And he's still not that good. I'm a hard critic on movies: 300 was one of the suckiest things I ever saw.

But this is so good that I bypass grammar and spelling errors. You have focused on the core structure of a story: the characters, and the core of the characters are their cares. The intensity and feelings of the Guardsman are not only heightened by our eagerness to see how he gets through it all, but the fact that we can choose what happens is equally compelling.

You also have a very good description on what's actually going on, and not bogging down on description of surroundings (we have pics for that). And your facial expressions and thoughts are highly essential for showing emotion (no adverbs or adjectives; that's very rare for writers).

~DustyGrafix Feb 27, 2010

Sorry for the long delay. I really appreciate you feedback, and it is inspiring to see such constructive criticism on works like this. I wanted to make this read like journal entries coming from a young recruit in the Imperial Army. No fancy writing, no educated sentance structure, just writes what he feels at the time.

Unlike most artists I know personally, I really enjoy critiques (good & bad) for it only makes me stronger. So I do hope you tag along and continue with your feedback and votes.